Thursday, April 17, 2008

Mother Crying [poem#1]


Everday somebody mother is crying
cause they babies
out here on the
street selling drug to
the young


Everday somebody
mother is crying
cause they
kidz are
dieing

Everday somebody mother is
crying cause they
babies is in the back
of the policie wogon


why are these mother crying
i guess cause
they looseing
there kidz
one by one

2 comments:

G. Latman said...
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G. Latman said...

You have free verse and two or more stanzas here, but there are no metaphors or similes. The criteria for evaluating your work includes these examples of figurative language, which you omitted.